tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3386668104138512969.post8685536110618401615..comments2014-04-08T12:48:26.101+02:00Comments on Creative Writing Vejen Business College: Political speech Benthttp://www.blogger.com/profile/11845712266620744382noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3386668104138512969.post-37769454711642830122014-04-01T15:13:30.751+02:002014-04-01T15:13:30.751+02:00And was the backwards phrase 'live hopefully&#...And was the backwards phrase 'live hopefully'? You could have integrated it much better by putting it in the punch line: "We Americans must stand together and live hopefully!"Benthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11845712266620744382noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3386668104138512969.post-76081312548419308242014-04-01T15:11:27.177+02:002014-04-01T15:11:27.177+02:00As a speech this works really well. You have emoti...As a speech this works really well. You have emotional appeal "We American people must stand together"; and you have a rational argument about what needs to be improved to make America better. So, good job in imitating a politician!<br /><br />But there are many mistakes in your text: Proud is a verb - the noun is 'pride'. "We American people" - that is in the plural, so the verb 'live' should also be in the plural. "a hopefully life" - there should be an adjective in front of life, not an adverb! Feel free to correct those mistakes in your revision.Benthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11845712266620744382noreply@blogger.com