Writing game 3 - Speech
Thank you
for coming everyone.
We are
gathered here today to raise funds for the Make-A-Wish foundation. They are establishing
a new adventure center and they need to raise 300,000$ for the huts where the
kids are going to sleep. I hope you are grateful enough to donate to help these
poor kids, so they can have a good time in their otherwise dark life.
The kids
can come here for a week and have fun with other kids who are in the same
situation. It’s important for these kids to know that there are also good
things in the dark life they’re living.
I hope you
realize how important this is to the kids and make a donation, so the children
get a chance to experience the great thing that is life.
Thank you
very much for your attention, I hope it convinced you to make a contribution to
this important charity.
Words: building for money
Thanks for listing the backwards phrase! The task was of course to incorporate it in your text, which shouldn't be difficult to do. Revise accordingly.
ReplyDeleteThis is a very well written speech, and it stays well within the genre. There is logical and emotional appeal, direct address to the audience and a speaker that we can empathize with. All good.
One thing I don't get: Your use of the word 'grateful' is strange. What would the audience be grateful for, and why would that make them give away money?
Very nice speech! It is nice and long... Nice touch with the spaces between each section!.
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