The day was
long
The weather
was freezing cold
Yet it was
the most beautiful day
In a long
time
It was the
end of your time
The end of
our time
The end of
you time
It was the
end of everything
When you
was put in the ground
We was
going to say goodbye
But you was
not speaking
You were just sleeping
You were already away
God needed
you
Even though,
that I needed you more
However, god
has the power to take things from us
Even though
we don’t want him to
However, in
the end I don’t believe in him anymore
I hate him
more then I love him
Because he
took you from me
To soon, and to fast
This is an incredibly strong poem about loss. Very well done! The reader can feel the emotion of the "I" in the poem.
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