Thursday, March 27, 2014

Writing game 3

Hello everyone!
Today I talk about the weather, and how it’s affects we people. Both on ours mood and in praxis. Today the weather is so good and the sun is shining. It’s 15 degrees outside.
It is soon summer, and that’s we love. We go to the beach and swim in the sea. Girls in bikini, boys in shorts. Lots of suncreme on the kids.
But in the winter time, the cold and the snow affect a lot on us. It’s all time dark outside, and we don’t get the vitamins from the sun. All it’s more negative for us.
Sometimes there is Heathway in the summer, its over 35 degrees. But can the weather be to hot?
Now I will show you an overview for the weather for the two last years.
As you can see, the temperature is gone up year for year. But why?

Now you should search on you computer and find some reasons to why the temperature has done up. You have a half hour.

1 comment:

  1. It wasn't until the very end that I realized that this was (probably) a teacher's speech to the class. Could you make that clear from the beginning?

    I don't see any trace of a backwards phrase being used in your text? Is there one, or did you forget?

    The contents of the speech are OK - we get some facts and an argument. However, there is no real audience appeal in it.

    A few mistakes: Look at your pronouns in the first line: "ours mood" should be "our mood". "How it's affects we people" - "it's" is a contraction of "it is", so obviously wrong use here. "We people" - why not write "us"? Much simpler, and correct. What about "Heathway"? Why a capital "H"? I imagine you mean "heat wave", no? Remember to proofread!


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