Hello everyone
My name is Diana and I want to tell you about my life
story during today.
I have been looking forward to come here today, but I have to admit, that I’ve also been a little scared. I’m not use to stand in front of that many people. I am really nervous and anxious, so you have to bear with me. As you all know, I have been suffering from a depression and I am slowly starting to feel better. I am here to tell you about all the things I’ve been through these past years and what I have been doing to get through the horrible things, caused by my depression.
If my thoughts are true, many of you have met up today, with that intention, to get some advice to move on and feel better. But as I said previously, this is my story, and I am not sure, the things I’ve been through will help you the same way, as they helped me.
But, I have always had a very supporting man, who has been there for me, every time I felt worst. For many years I have been seeing a psychologist, and yes, of course it has helped me, when I was on the edge of a breakdown. Trust me; you wouldn’t see me when I felt that way.
But then my husband said; that he had seen in the television, that they seek test persons for a program with B.S Christiansen. People with depression. So I send an enrolment and one month after I got a mail, where it said, I was accepted. We learned to take control and go beyond what we thought was impossible. That has been the best experience of my life. Thanks to my husband, B.S Christiansen and the other participants, I now have a much better life.
I have been looking forward to come here today, but I have to admit, that I’ve also been a little scared. I’m not use to stand in front of that many people. I am really nervous and anxious, so you have to bear with me. As you all know, I have been suffering from a depression and I am slowly starting to feel better. I am here to tell you about all the things I’ve been through these past years and what I have been doing to get through the horrible things, caused by my depression.
If my thoughts are true, many of you have met up today, with that intention, to get some advice to move on and feel better. But as I said previously, this is my story, and I am not sure, the things I’ve been through will help you the same way, as they helped me.
But, I have always had a very supporting man, who has been there for me, every time I felt worst. For many years I have been seeing a psychologist, and yes, of course it has helped me, when I was on the edge of a breakdown. Trust me; you wouldn’t see me when I felt that way.
But then my husband said; that he had seen in the television, that they seek test persons for a program with B.S Christiansen. People with depression. So I send an enrolment and one month after I got a mail, where it said, I was accepted. We learned to take control and go beyond what we thought was impossible. That has been the best experience of my life. Thanks to my husband, B.S Christiansen and the other participants, I now have a much better life.
At last, I want to say thanks to all of you, who have
met up here today and thanks for listening to a very anxious, scared and
nervous me. I hope you all will get better soon.
Interesting speech on an interesting topic. The audience is addressed sensibly, and the topic is clearly stated. There is appeal to the audience, and they are drawn into the text with phrases such as: "Trust me; you wouldn’t (want to) see me when I felt that way." The argument could have been a bit clearer, though, since it is never explained what BS did and why it helped.
ReplyDeleteTry to work with your commas - you use far too many. In this passage: "If my thoughts are true, many of you have met up today, with that intention, to get some advice to move on and feel better. But as I said previously, this is my story, and I am not sure, the things I’ve been through will help you the same way, as they helped me" four of the commas you have put in could/should have been left out. Can you see which ones are unnecessary?
By the way, where is the backwards phrase from the word hoard? Did you forget?
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