Chanel is visiting
Billy in Denmark, the clock is 11:00 am and they are walking down the street,
when she says.
Chanel: “How are you Billy?”
Billy: “I’m really good, Chanel! How about you?”
Chanel: “I really enjoy being in Denmark with you.”
Suddenly a child screams: “I want an ice-cream,
mommy!” The child seems really pissed and he keeps on screaming until his mom
tells him to stop and that she will get him some Kellogg’s breakfast or some
Lays chips.
Chanel and Billy move on again and they see a family
discussing something about planets, they say something about the moon, sun and
something about mars men. When suddenly a newspaper guy shouts John F. Kennedy
is dead, and something about he was killed with a special type of gun, maybe
something like a colt.
Chanel and Billy are shocked and they look like Mona
Lisa in the face, completely frozen. Suddenly Jacob says: “I need something to
drink, or maybe something to eat, a plate with some salad and carrots could be
good! I just need some knives.”
Far too random to work as travel writing - a non-fiction genre of text. This reads like an absurd sit-com manuscript, introducing characters like "Jacob" at the end without warning. Not good.
ReplyDeleteI liked this sentence: "Chanel and Billy are shocked and they look like Mona Lisa in the face, completely frozen." That is creative, interesting and funny use of the ingredients.
Far too random to work as travel writing - a non-fiction genre of text
ReplyDeleteI liked this sentence: "Chanel and Billy are shocked and they look like Mona Lisa in the face, completely frozen." That is creative, interesting and funny use of the ingredients.
That's a do-over, Jacob!
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