Rewritten poem to a story -
I have my star,
she shine as bright as the sun. She is the light in the dark, a bright star.
The eye show love, a love with no match. My heart longs for you and you my star will not fade in my heart, thou you are the one.
No thing is as fair as you, thou you have no bad side, nor do you fail, you are my star.
The eye show love, a love with no match. My heart longs for you and you my star will not fade in my heart, thou you are the one.
No thing is as fair as you, thou you have no bad side, nor do you fail, you are my star.
Most of the story is there, but you forgot the punch-line: It is his poem that makes her immortal!
ReplyDeleteGood use of one-syllable words only.
I guess the word 'thou' confused you. It means 'you' in Shakespeare's time, so saying 'thou you' makes no sense. If you want to say 'though', that is a different matter!