Thursday, March 27, 2014

thoughts

Shall i love you on a hot day
My love is an art and youre new start
Youre love to you is fair but i will not press save

The thing i will save is what i wrote

Simon sonata 1

1 comment:

  1. So is this Shakespeare with a computer? Good idea!
    You've got the story in just a few lines - nice...

    The spelling here needs improving: "youre" is not a word in English. It is either "your" which is a pronoun, or "you're" which is a contraction of "you are". I can't tell which one you mean to use when you write "and youre new start". When you write "Youre love", you probably mean "Your love", right?

    Also, "I" is spelled with a capital I in English. We put question marks at the end of sentences that are questions: "Shall I love you on a hot day?"

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